研究生商科文书点评

2013年9月17日

责任编辑:刘晶晶

摘要:本文的亮点在于解释为什么要选择Simon School,也就是Simon School如何帮助学生实现自己的职业目标上。职业目标方面,大家其实都差不多,关键还是看如何把自己的需求,与学校所能为你提供的匹配上。咨询热线:010-67080808

 

  Essay 1. Describe your post-M.B.A. or post-M.S. career plans. How does your past education and experience support your career objectives? What aspects of the Simon School program make it a good choice for your graduate study? Why have you chosen to apply to the Simon School for graduate study? (500 word maximum)

  题目分析:这个essay topic问题很直接,就是问学生过往的学术和职业经历是什么?未来的职业规划是什么?以及Simon School如何帮助学生实现这些理想?回答这种商科题目,最主要的就是简单,明了,直奔主题,并且用真实具体的个人经历,证明两点:首先,自己有足够能力完成这个项目,并且为将来的职业发展做了充分的思考和准备;其次,Simon School的M.S.项目确实与学生的需求想吻合。下面我们一起来看一篇范文:

  In the short run, after the successful completion of my graduate studies, I want to work as an accountant at an American financial services firm to learn their high quality accounting standards. In the long term, I plan to bring some significant change to the current situation of business services in my hometown, Zhejiang where business consultation services still lack professionalism and standardization.

  The reason why I want to pursue a higher education in accounting field is a product of my circumstance. My parents are both business people who never had the chance to receive a proper education. Therefore, at the relatively young age of eleven, I became been the chief accountant, budgeter and planner of our family business. In turn, this early involvement with business has turned into a lifelong infatuation with business and accounting. Due to constant exposure to financial figures and numbers I also developed a deep interest in mathematics, and my academic performance in mathematics courses has tended to reflect this amity. While I was still in high school, there were even times that I thought about being a mathematician.

  In college I was able to finish a four year program in three years. Having completed my undergraduate study a year ahead of schedule, and worked as an intern at two of the major accounting firms in the province, now I am ready to take a further step in achieving my dream in the accounting field.

  For any applicant, reputation, location, and size are all sound reasons why Simon school could make an ideal learning environment. I am drawn to Simon school because it provides an intimate and collegial atmosphere. I have heard from alumni that students at Simon have unparalleled opportunities to learn from distinguished faculty through small classroom interactions and research collaboration. I relish opportunities to work with professors and, if given the chance, I plan to make full use of their knowledge and insights to supplement and reinforce my studies.

  The intimate one-on-one career counseling provided for every student throughout the whole academic year is also one of the reasons I am attracted to Simon school. Provided this advantage, I could get more specific and orientated coaching on my career planning. As a young woman who has wide and varied dreams, I believe solid career plan and practical counseling are essential if I am to stay focused.

  To this end, as well, Simon school’s recognition and nurturing of women business leaders is a very important component of my decision to apply to the school. As a 21 year old ambitious young woman and feminist, I believe women can be as successful as men in the business world. At Simon school I could learn the essential qualities of successful business women, and learn from many of the accomplished peers at Simon school. Therefore, as a young woman who is looking to become successful in the business world, I can not think of a better choice than Simon school.

  全文点评:本文的亮点在于解释为什么要选择Simon School,也就是Simon School如何帮助学生实现自己的职业目标上。职业目标方面,大家其实都差不多,关键还是看如何把自己的需求,与学校所能为你提供的匹配上。与其谈论学校地理位置如何优越、排名多么靠前等这些所有人都知道的选校理由,不如像本文那样,谈一些细节,比如classroom interactions和thoughtful career services等。

  很多同学在回答为什么选择这个大学或者M.S. 项目的时候,都会感觉没有方向。其实道理很简单:就是把实现你的职业目标所需要的东西,与项目所能提供给你的东西,结合起来。虽然听起来容易,但难点在于如何恰到好处地把二者联系起来。

 

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